Before I say anything else: I usually heavily dislike stories written in the second person pov. This one's good though. Writing Quality: 5/5. The story flows well. There are very few mistakes and the chapters are of a decent length, which allows for deeper immersion. This is good because stories written from that perspective kinda need that to be readable. Story Development: Here I struggled a bit, but in the end, I gave 5/5. The reason for the struggle is that it felt a bit too easy at the start. but, taking into consideration the multiverse he was born in, his talent, while prodigious, doesn't amount to anything if he doesn't grow at a ridiculous speed. The pacing feels fast but actually isn't all that extreme, which is a good thing in action-heavy stories. The ideas of the author are well presented and up until now, the story is cohesive. The POV changes feel a bit charring at times but that seems to be intentional and it doesn't take away from the enjoyment of reading a well-developed story. Character Design: 5/5. The MC is a friendly dude. He has his flaws and you'll see them, but he is charismatic and feels real enough to gain depth from his flaws instead of an annoyance factor. Canon characters are in character for the most part, which is rare in fanfiction. Interactions with them feel amazingly real and I could picture them reacting just as they were depicted to. Updating Stability: 5/5. This may change, but for now, we get a decent amount of chapters at a nice pace. World Background: 5/5. Universe 6 is an uncommon choice. And it's done amazingly here. There are enough fresh ideas to keep you on tour toes while not loosing any of that Dragonball authenticity. His story could have happened just like that in the original work. Truly well done. Conclusion: The story uses a POV that has a bad rep, but it's amazingly written. Give it a try if you are a Dragonball enthusiast. If you can't stomach the POV, you lost maybe a few minutes of your life. If you find that it matters less than you thought it would, you'll have an amazing read with a likable MC to add to tour list.
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