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GeneralAldrnari
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2022-10-05 19:45

Has a story but not a good one. It's your typical 'Webnovel' quality wish fulfillment. Writing wish fulfillment stories isn't bad but it's on how the writer executes and make it entertaining. Is the story entertaining? In my own opinion, no. It lacks dialogue and details and some common sense. The Mc is not even likeable and I can't feel emotions to him as a reader which is very important if you want to have more audience. I have a lot more to say but in the end I suggest you reading some veteran writers like crossedge, einlion, and other famous QQ authors (Webnovel is filled with 'kids' here so don't bother). If you want to earn $$ as a writer then learn from them.

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say more pls... I want to know my faults even if its neg

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