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2024-02-07 17:42

This is a good story, wonderful world building and lovely characters. I love that this is a good amount of chapters instead of the 300+, 500+ or even 1000+ chapters! I can appreciate the story more because of this. However, it needs some serious editing. There are inconsistencies with the sentence and paragraph structure. And a big issue is the wrong pronouns getting used is so consistent. I feel if people are paying to read the chapters on WebNovel, authors need to make some effort on this part for the readers as this will elevate your novel as which it deserves!

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Thank you for the kind words 😊Unfortunately, since I published this story through a third party, I can't edit the grammar in this story. However, please look forward to my other stories in the future. I promise I will continue to learn to create better stories!

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