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Night_Crawler619
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2022-04-14 18:17

I'm doing this review solely based on writing quality as the story is still progressing and there isn't much to comment on that. I don't have any issues with writing quality except that some starting/naming letters were not capitalized and it felt repetitive. I would suggest using Grammarly or Google Docs for spell checks to avoid such mistakes. Nevertheless, the story itself is very good in all honesty and I would like to read it further and see how the world develops.

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thanx for the review man

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Good book, I like your writing style and concept, the grammar usage is pretty good, but there is the big problem. There is sometimes your concept not neatly arranged, like umm.. Some of them are exceed the paragraph

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Have you ever ride a rollercoaster where it starts slow at the beginning then it started to speed up? in this book you are accelerated immediately. The story threw you directly in there. There are still minor errors but those things are easily fixable nice job You got hooked by the story and I am pretty sure you will stay reading it. I know, because it happens to me. I am a picky reader. I usually have to reread early chapters a few times before I start binge-reading it.

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