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Wpext
WpextLv132yr
2022-07-13 03:46

Hey author-San wanted to leave a review as well as a question I have…. First my question who is the main female lead, and the romance when we gonna see some development with Adam and whoever is gonna be is counterpart or even harem(which I am rooting for here HAREMMMM) (if you can answer that) Next my review as of chapter 32 I love the story so far honestly have no compliants if I had any it would be the “split personality/primordial Authorities” amazing concept just it needs to fleshed out a pit more for me

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Kepalozoid
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Well, as you read, you will understand the concept of primordial authorities. It would be no fun if all of the information are revealed at the beginning. As for the romance, it would have a slow development but it will be worth it. As for the FML, well, you will see, because it will be a little bit different from what you might expect too, at least I hope. ^^ Thanks for reading.

Bnodon_ProjukT
Bnodon_ProjukTLv2

so no harem ?

Kepalozoid:Well, as you read, you will understand the concept of primordial authorities. It would be no fun if all of the information are revealed at the beginning. As for the romance, it would have a slow development but it will be worth it. As for the FML, well, you will see, because it will be a little bit different from what you might expect too, at least I hope. ^^ Thanks for reading.
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IamMountTai
IamMountTaiLv13

Review that EVERYONE going into this story should read. With the emergence of the whole otome and villian webnovel/lightnovel genre, readers in the audience come with certain expectations. You expect a whole academy, a kingdom or what not. No, its not that this novel doesn't have that similar stuff. But as of this review which is the max chapters (40ish), the whole story is very different to what one would expect from coming in. The novel's world building, the amount of POV changes just for 1 particular scene, the slow pacing, the amount of exposition, the amount of deepness really suggests that this world powers will be as large as a CULTIVATION novel (Multiverse/universal level confirmed). All of this makes the novel feel quite heavy to read. This is definitely not your typical slice of life rom com novel you would expect. Speaking of comedy, there was almost none of that and its very serious (though I expect it to come during the academy arc). About 20 chapters + that's when the story starts becoming less expository and heavy, but the qualities this novel have are still there. Not to mention, the story feels very shounen (tra*sh to strong) but on a seinen level of maturity (18-40 males). Lots of introspection to add to that. Thus, this novel's content is definitely not for everyone catered to this genre. It's a super big world and a serious take on the genre. If you cannot handle this, then I do not suggest picking it up because even the chapters feel long themselves. You probably won't be able to survive the first 25 chapters or so. END OF REVIEW FOR EVERYONE TO READ. ---------------------------------------------------------------------------- REVIEW THAT YOU CAN READ IF YOU WANT TO. Now I will go into some thoughts I personally have for the novel. Writing linguistic- I was surprised to hear that the author is NOT a native. Because the English in this novel is quite good. The grammar and punctuation itself barely had any problems for webnovel standard. The most common mistake was commas where they shouldn't be. Even though fiction writing can exempt some things, half of what shouldn't there are plain mistakes. If there is an improvement, that would be to make it more flowery and better immersion. But that's difficult to do and I'm basically talking about the actual bookstore publishing level. In other words, as a webnovel quality it is satisfactory. However, I do suggest to tone down the POVs for new characters and keep in mind it will slow scenes down in the novel. Especially coming into the novel, I was overwhelmed. I can't imagine how it would be for a non-native. Story development: Overall, because of its pacing its pretty good. Things are slowly fleshed out and not rushed at all. But one can easily imagine the downsides. If you read the above its not hard to find the consequences. I say its pretty good, but that's because I was able to somehow keep my retention and understand it. Some would REALLY Hate it because of how much content and expository is smashed in your face. It really reminds me of reading Earth's Greatest Magus (One of the all-time top stories on Webnovel). Thus for some people the story development can be very bad. Characters are very good and developing well. I like the main ones so far and heavily look forward to them. The author with his POVs shows that he takes care in presenting them as 3D. Although if I had to be critical, they pale compared to a book-store level (they feel more like characters than humans). But on a webnovel level, very good and enough. World Background- As large as a cultivation novel. Expect 600 chapters + at minimum. That's what it feels like. -------------- Conclusion: It's a novel that can potentially be one of the top novels on this site. It's definitely a hidden gem. I hope this novel becomes at least one of my top 10 favourite novels on this site because it really does feel like it will become one. Every review of mine now ends with me wanting to ship. Oh wait... 40 chapters and with its pacing and lack of heroines I really can't. There's only 1 heroine really that we seen so far (a few? maybe have appeared but just brief). Author I beseech you to create a romantic drama! I wish for at least a strong heavy, dramatic love triangle at the minimum. (Think Oregairu and White Album 2). Harem in the sense of multiple girls interested around mc is preferred. Not in the sense of polygamy and such. You can write realistic characters and hopefully no ruin of story with sm*t. With your story, sm*t scenes should be used to really show that their relationship has extended to this level of LOVE. Not lus*. 1-2 wives is what I like: Love is war. I want to ship! And enjoy the anticipation of my ship sailing or sinking. And the heart wrenching drama that unfolds. Not everyone gets a happy ending. Liu vs the Villainess. Doesn't this love triangle sound great if you focused on them? One's an ice cold beauty, another is an apathetic villainous. We don't need other heroines! Imagine the dynamic interactions. Wouldn't it be so interesting? I would love it if you would do this. They are probably so similar too. You can play around the Mc's taste and that's why he feels great affection for both; however, struggles to choose as they're similar. Ofc its more complex than that but its stuff you can work around with for the complexity of romantic relationships. Awesome novel. Keep it up!

Helldragon_xd
Helldragon_xdLv1
Teddie_Chen
Teddie_ChenLv1

One of the best novels I've read on wn, and extremely addcting to the point where I always check it the moment I open wn. Everytime I see that it's updated, I literally go over the moon. Writing Quality - Though there are a few grammatical errors, the writing style and words are nothing short of exceptional. Every thing is described nicely and easy to understand. Plus, grammar doesn't matter much these days so you get 5 stars. Stability of Updates - Love that it's updating everyday, but sadly I read too fast to be satisfied. I respect your effort for keeping up everyday! 5 stars! Story Development - A bit cliched but also has originality. Incredibly enjoyable to read, plus I like the small twists every now and then. It also makes me want to know what happens next, getting me more addcted. 5 stars again! Character Design - <Spoilers> Cool reincarnated neet from another world with the power of a god and a cold tall woman with ice powers and a cute baby. Excellent diversity so far. And the character development- oh yes the character development- exquisite~ Love how he has to change his mindset first to be able to become stronger and control his power. Also love the fact that his life mission is to get the best gf in the world. World Background - When I first read this, it left me speechless. Putting both fantasy hierarchy and the space setting is an incredible idea, plus there's also an backstory of how it came to be like that and that makes it all the more interesting to read. And it's so incredibly well written that it actually makes me think that such a setting could be real and out there somewhere in the universe. Overall Score - P E R F E C T I O N I would 100% recommend this to anyone I meet. Need more chapterrrrrs!!! (I think I'm going to need treatment for my addiction now)

proking
prokingLv11

I just finished reading your first chapter. I must say you put a lot of work in it and it's creative. However, it's a lot of exposition in the first Chapter. All the backstory, worldbuilding... You know. Every Information that's not conveyed by Dialogue or Action. The other scenes beside the Exposition are good though. Keep as much Information as possible hidden from the audience They are smart, and will figure it out You have a great Set up. Try to show a little bit of scene of mc getting bashed up in his date or something. I'm not a date expert. So, I can't tell you this in detail. Only can give an idea of what should be written first. If you show such scenes where mc feel very low and sad, although he put a lot of effort in this date, it would give a proper way to convey emotions of the mc in a dialogue or actions. Also, show only what is necessary for the character to know, not for the audience. Like the god of creation and God of void info. It's too much for me to process this much info right at the beginning and I'm sure it is same for other readers Additionally, it makes it reasonable to tell our mc and the the audience patiently, the Info that's very basic for anyone to know. It is currently all internal, I think that's hard to convey without any external reflection. Like, talking with someone else about it, or showing the emotional change through action can get a better effect. If you just tell what happened, it also takes a little bit away from the Reader finding out about it. You know... Now, I am not an expert though... I've seen many novels doing the same thing at first. some get popular while some doesn't. It depends. So, it's up to you whether you feel right to change the arrangement of plot a bit and add some emotional scenes in it to make it more lively and natural. That's all I have to say. I'll leave a review on webnovel if you like. However, I need your permission If I can put this up or not. thinking Anyway, good work. You did a great job! Keep it up!

Grim_Reaper_73
Grim_Reaper_73Lv4

This my first time writing a review and my English is pretty bad so sorry if I made any mistakes. This is one of my favorite novels I discovered it by chance but it turn out that I found gold. Writing Quality- there are almost no grammatical errors English isn't my first language so even if there's some grammatical errors they are negligible since everything is understandable. the writing style is so good that you feel like you're inside the story especially the different POVs of the same moment, that's what truly suck you inside the story. ⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐ Stability of Updates - there's no need to talk about this, the update is daily without any delays⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐ Story Development - steady development of the story with a lot of unexpected but enjoyable twists that make you eager to know what happens next and make you think of a lot of possibilities it can even make you join the {F5 SECT}.⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐ Character Design - maybe you won't like the mc at first but as you see him changes (becoming smarter,stronger, more confident and more aware about what's around him) you'll love him. as for other characters they are so real that you can feel their emotions and understand their thinking⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐ World Background - it reminds me of the novel <I’m the Evil Lord of an Intergalactic Empire!> but it's something bigger and mor diverse it makes you think we are just a speck of dust in the universe and there's something hidden in space that we didn't discover and it might reach us at any moment.⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐ -WARNING- THIS NOVEL IS ADDICTIVE, PROCEED WITH CAUTION. Wow it's my first time writing something this long.

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