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mikatamo1
mikatamo1Lv32yr
2022-05-14 22:18

I think your story is a bit interesting but your MC is not for my taste your MC is too naive for someone who was an adult who die one time already and too edgy along with has a massive ego from nowhere and is very prideful about himself as he fights again an Anbu who is far too strong for him and yet he still tries to kill that Anbu without think of any consequence until at the end when he thinks that Anbu is death besides those, I also think your MC underestimates the one who he fights or knows a lot as I read. Also, your MC is stupid as you were writing in chapter 4 that he has known a bit know about Naruto world as he hear and read in the fanfictions so that [he knew about the major events that are going to take thanks to a few fanfictions] but yet for some reason, the Uzumaki Clan destruction is not a major event So to sum up I do like the idea of the power that your choice for MC and the story is good enough to pass time for now and that is, but I do not like your MC persona and his naive along with too much edgy

Reborn in Naruto with an Unbreakable Shield

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Aaron_Vittore
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yeah the Mc makes it hard to read.

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As you know it is a tradition to be the first one to review your own story. So I'm going to show myself some self love and give myself a 5/5 :D

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Classic_Joe
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There are little to no mistakes as far as grammar and spelling go however that is the best thing about the story. The MC is childish, obnoxious, lazy and stupid. In six chapters nothing has happened except a below average reincarnation scene and the MC having to go to a library to figure out that he should maybe do a pushup to get stronger. The author claims it is AU, i like a well done AU, this is not a well done AU. Just changing dates and time but not outcomes.

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DEATHS_SHADOW07
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There is nothing to say. PURE PERFECTION! 👍 . . . . . . . . . . . . . PLZ DON'T DROP PLZ DON'T DROP PLZ DON'T DROP PLZ DON'T DROP PLZ DON'T DROP PLZ DON'T DROP PLZ DON'T DROP PLZ DON'T DROP!

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Hanni_Baal
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I quite like how it is written, the development of the character seems normal to me, that is to say that in a similar situation I could perfectly behave like this, I like that it breaks a couple of paradigms or legends that we have about the world of Naruto, leaving open some possible theories of the fans. It mixes different references that make it more fun and the only thing that bothers me is that I have no idea how much time he has left. They haven't told us, or I don't remember reading it, in what period of time it is, I know that we are going after the first Hokage, because he is already treated as a legend, obviously before the destruction of the town and Sarutobi is already Hokage, that is to say , most likely just after the second war. For now it is starting well, it has an interesting power and a lot of potential, I like that it has developed the story with grays, it has a future, we have to see how it develops.

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love the start! and it's power, too early to give reviews but I hope this can motivate author to write more and first most important thing is please keep updating, pls don't drop, it's okay of its one chap a week. 👏👏😀if u lack ideas, I can help

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It's a really great Naruto fanfiction!!! 👍👍 There's not much fanfic where MC is from Uzumaki clan and live in Uzushio, so it's already interesting to watch.. plus Zeke have a One Piece body and power (Haki, Devil Fruit power), it will make him so strong.. Please don't make MC/Zeke a loner (give him some friends) and make more interaction between Zeke and others.. I hope you make him can use seals too author san (he's an Uzumaki).. Can't wait to see next chapter.. keep up the good work author san 😁😁👍👍😍😍

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