The pacing is a bit too quick and the characters and setting is a bit bland. The grammar isn't too bad but their are some mistakes, also the inner monologue gets too cluttered

This is quite good keep up the good work hope to see more chaps thx!!

so I don't normally write reviews because it takes a while and a lot of energy out of me. But I wanted to write one for this story because it was amazing. the story is great so far for the first eight chapters and the only complaint. I could really Levy against the story out of chapter 8 is some minor grammar issues that took away from my ability to enjoy the story a little bit. but the dialogue and the character's and story development are done well so far. One direction I was thinking the story could go sense some of the skills that were purely magical in the dragon Ball series are being substituted with Ki in the story. is to start his own sect like the hand or the nine rings and build an inner circle of trusted members and help them unlock their ability to use Ki by either using a fruit of might or by one the potential unlocking skills like gurus or the elder Kai technique. I could see the main character mainly doing this to increase his variety of techniques over the millenia and to make humans more fun to fight. in other words he'd help them unlock their ki and teach them some basics techniques and see what techniques people invent over the millennia and then copy them and keep the most useful techniques. also excited anticipating the next chapter and keep up the good work.

Every chapter just gets worse and worse with the plot, dialogue, grammar stays the same, the pacing, the common sense, practically everything gets worse except for grammar, it’s not good but that’s the only thing that stays the same for the current chap. 1.4/5

This needs a rework……………………………………….a lot of it imo…………………………………………………. Author needs help…………………………………………………………….this is the best i can give to you rn cuz this has a low chance of getting better……but it’s a Low. Chance it will

this was a great fanfic story but it did have some grammar errors and I'm starting to wonder if the author died or something. as we haven't seen an update in over a month. this is starting to look like one of those great fanfics that had a good start but the author just suddenly dropped it for no good reason whatsoever and didn't bother telling his fans why he wasn't going to continue the story. so it wil just remain a mystery to the people who liked the story.

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Why is it that authors stop writing good stories but can continue writing bad ones. Every good fic I read either ends shortly after a few chapters or is dropped but the bad ones continue going even if it is bad.

An honest review Starts off good but at chapter 7 or so the MC (who despite being a LEGENDARY SUPER SAIYAN has a lower power level then some humans) decides to throw a childish fit and go off to find humans and a “worthy opponent” (despite knowing its the MCU) he then goes into a random city, gets put in jail because of forced plot, and meets this group of theif kids. The sheer IQ drop the MC has in the first few chapters is INSANE and the plot is so forced that basically ALL the comments on the city chapters have noticed it.