I wanted to give this story a chance, I really did. However, a few things that immediately made me not able to continue reading it. The grammar is awful, words completely missing or mispelled. Not being able to parse what the writer is trying to convey makes it very hard to enjoy the story. The pacing is off too, he starts off at lvl one and the very next lvl gets a obviously op skill that allows him to enslave others…granted it’s not super useful in the beginning but it immediately gives him a leg up over everything else. The characters? Non existent, the author doesn’ even explain who the main character is or why he is a skeleton or why we care. Some background would go a long way in this case, it would allow us to relate to the character at least a little. I am already on chapter 6 and it still has done very little to remedy this. That being said , I like the idea behind the book and it’ obvious that the author is trying to make a decent story. So don’t take this as ”you should stop writing” please take it as constructive criticism to try to improve. I know some of it is due to translation. But even others that are translated read much better than this story.
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