Great plot, and wide arrays of good grammar and vocabulary. The thought and setting sound truly great. A heroic story in the making. Guys, it's worth reading!

Impressive work. The lead is really smart and that makes the story fun to read. It is all very exciting. Very interesting read, very fascinating.

A good start with great image created. The plot grows so well throughout the chapters while the picture becomes clearer through those words written. Overall a great read

The writing was pretty good, and I enjoyed the in depth world building the author does. You can really get a good feel of the fantasy world and adventure like world. There were a few errors her and there, and there could be some detail about the character descriptions and such, but so far the story starts out interesting! Keep up the good world author!

Great beginning! The story is pretty interesting so far and the creator does an incredible work of world-building so you'll be able truly to feel submerged within the supernatural daydream. Good command of English and used punctuation marks correctly. Perusers ought to check this out. Worth your time!

The idea and setting sounds really good, the power appears unique. I feel like the writing could be cleaner though. There are time where paragraphs could be separated into two and where it get's hard to tell who's who when there's dialogue.

I think the two main characters who were introduced are interesting enough. It would of been better if more time was spent polishing and improving the technical aspects of the novel.

I've come to like the story so far and the characters despite not reaching all that far in it due to distractions that came my way. Don't get me wrong, from a portion of the first chapter, my interest was grabbed and I love the fact that I can imagine the scenery so well with your descriptions. Your character design is admirable and I really love seeing when authors get it right. I look forward to reading the rest, you've earned yourself a regular reader, with that, I hope this story takes off soon as it would deserve to.

I think I am in love with the protagonist. Everything about this novel is flawless except for grammatical errors and spelling mistakes. I hope you will improve it in the future. Good job 😀