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infinityGod
infinityGodAuthor2yr
2022-03-12 03:09

Alright infinity God here, the reason I didn't put a full have stars, is-...... Writing quality>I'm trying to write chapters as fast as possible so I can stack them, so I'll make mistakes in Grammer. Story development> I guess it is developing quite nicely in my opinion. Character>Only Characters that belongs to me is the previous world Characters and the God in the universal control center. Updating stability>One can never truly promise this, if one does they are lying. World background>Unfortunately the world background is not mine, as I said before only previous world Characters and main character are mine.

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ArtoriaSimp
ArtoriaSimpLv13

No harem tag on a DxD fic?

infinityGod
infinityGodAuthor

Well he will not have a harem persay, but the things he will be doing later, more like girls that will love him but he won't love them back but he will do the naughty, he was a Supreme General, think he didn't have his full share of relationships in 50 years, hahaha that would be pretty funny a 50 year old virgin Supreme General, was the strongest in the world, worshipped by many both men and women yet was still a virgin, that would be the ultimate self control, he'd probably become a God in the other world by himself haha.

ArtoriaSimp:No harem tag on a DxD fic?
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AlphaZwei
AlphaZweiLv5

Means only cocktease. If I want that, I will read the original DXD.

infinityGod:Well he will not have a harem persay, but the things he will be doing later, more like girls that will love him but he won't love them back but he will do the naughty, he was a Supreme General, think he didn't have his full share of relationships in 50 years, hahaha that would be pretty funny a 50 year old virgin Supreme General, was the strongest in the world, worshipped by many both men and women yet was still a virgin, that would be the ultimate self control, he'd probably become a God in the other world by himself haha.
MaTachin
MaTachinLv10

FeelsWeirdMan

infinityGod:Well he will not have a harem persay, but the things he will be doing later, more like girls that will love him but he won't love them back but he will do the naughty, he was a Supreme General, think he didn't have his full share of relationships in 50 years, hahaha that would be pretty funny a 50 year old virgin Supreme General, was the strongest in the world, worshipped by many both men and women yet was still a virgin, that would be the ultimate self control, he'd probably become a God in the other world by himself haha.
infinityGod
infinityGodAuthor

Well just because someone loves you doesn't mean you HAVE to love them back.

MaTachin:FeelsWeirdMan
MaTachin
MaTachinLv10

nah the naughty thing

infinityGod:Well just because someone loves you doesn't mean you HAVE to love them back.
infinityGod
infinityGodAuthor

Oh......my bad then....*Awkward Silence*

MaTachin:nah the naughty thing
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Sajat_Toyi
Sajat_ToyiLv1

for a moment, will the woman who slept with the main character marry another man? I hope not, it's already categorized as ntr😅

infinityGod:Well he will not have a harem persay, but the things he will be doing later, more like girls that will love him but he won't love them back but he will do the naughty, he was a Supreme General, think he didn't have his full share of relationships in 50 years, hahaha that would be pretty funny a 50 year old virgin Supreme General, was the strongest in the world, worshipped by many both men and women yet was still a virgin, that would be the ultimate self control, he'd probably become a God in the other world by himself haha.
ExaltedBlank
ExaltedBlankLv6

if you have a one night stand with someone and they get married later, does it mean u got NTR'ed?

Sajat_Toyi:for a moment, will the woman who slept with the main character marry another man? I hope not, it's already categorized as ntr😅
Sajat_Toyi
Sajat_ToyiLv1

Yes, I don't want women to be slept with by me to get married, all women slept by me are just for me😈

ExaltedBlank:if you have a one night stand with someone and they get married later, does it mean u got NTR'ed?
MaTachin
MaTachinLv10

Sajat_Toyi:Yes, I don't want women to be slept with by me to get married, all women slept by me are just for me😈
Sajat_Toyi
Sajat_ToyiLv1

MaTachin:
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Bimaru_Slayer
Bimaru_SlayerLv4

I agree with him

MaTachin:
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Bimaru_Slayer
Bimaru_SlayerLv4

it's stupid to give your body to stranger or someone u don't love

ExaltedBlank:if you have a one night stand with someone and they get married later, does it mean u got NTR'ed?
infinityGod
infinityGodAuthor

Not everyone, but yes.

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Ziond
ZiondLv12

Does the grammar improve? I tried reading the first chapter, and tbh it’s a little bit hard to read.

infinityGod
infinityGodAuthor

Yes, but I try not to make it to philosophical, I keep it at a baseline while increasing the level little by little over time to simulate growth.

Ziond:Does the grammar improve? I tried reading the first chapter, and tbh it’s a little bit hard to read.
Orion_Ridge
Orion_RidgeLv2

So, will they marry others after the "naughty"?

infinityGod:Well he will not have a harem persay, but the things he will be doing later, more like girls that will love him but he won't love them back but he will do the naughty, he was a Supreme General, think he didn't have his full share of relationships in 50 years, hahaha that would be pretty funny a 50 year old virgin Supreme General, was the strongest in the world, worshipped by many both men and women yet was still a virgin, that would be the ultimate self control, he'd probably become a God in the other world by himself haha.
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InfinityAndBeyond
InfinityAndBeyondLv5

I don't know why this ff didn't that much of reviews and very underrated, but here is mine: This fanfic is good and maybe one of the best, why?? it's because the writing quality is good, not excellent or the best, but still good..... The characters are still the same as in the Canon, no Rias being so lazy, manipulative and dependent on his brother.... also no Chinese cliques, no befriending Issei and babysitting him, no hidden OP OC villain(i hate when there is), no pervert, idiot and simp mc....... I can say that this is one of the best DXD fanfic that I've read, i know that there is more fanfic that is better than this and better grammar or story but I didn't enjoy some of those because of how much they change the characters, like Rias being too much lazy, manipulative, and dependent on her brother...... although i enjoy it at the start but too much of those types makes it boring and annoying...... no hate for Rias please, she didn't deserve it, although she manipulated Issei but she gave her virginity to him and become his wife, she also gave too much to him that it can't be measure..... what did she give?? she make him a devil, so she indirectly activated his sacred gear, because it won't be activated if Issei didn't gain power to control it.... Issei will also die when he was stabbed by Raynare... what Ddraig will save him??? no Ddraig won't, he would just got another host when Issei dies..... Rias also open new way and road for Issei, she makes him very powerful, Issei won't have it if he just stays as ordinary teenage boy.... because Issei became strong he also get girls, do you all think that Issei, a perverted, simp and beta teenage boy who also have a bad reputation will get many girls, beautiful girls and powerful girls??? they will just look at him with disdain or disinterest or won't even look at him if he just stay as ordinary...... Issei's life also became better, although his life became more dangerous but life with money, power, fame and girls is much better than nothing........ and let me say that without Rias, Issei will be nothing or just will die, although he have a Longinus, we can't be sure that other character will save him or train him, i mean they can just kill him and get his sacred gear right?? why would they waste their time and effort to train a perverted and idiot mc when they can just get his sacred gear and use it themselves..... think all of what i say guys....

DontCallMeSimp
DontCallMeSimpLv3
SkyNeves
SkyNevesLv11

Hi! This review is made after 10 chapters... and why 10 and not the +100? Because I don't know if I want to keep reading it but anyway let's focus on the review. For those who might want to bash me I'll make a scale of my ratings: 1⭐-Yikes/Very Bad 2⭐-Not that Bad 3⭐-Normal/Not bad but not good either 4⭐-Good/Yeah I can get down to this 5⭐-Very Good/WOW 😲 Now with that out of the way let's get started. 1- Writing Quality: There is a need to clean up all the early chapters: grammar, thoughts and speech quotation marks, and how certain characters speak. Examples: Grammar[Lefted=Left] this is the most recent one and it hurt a lot(for me). Thoughts: .'Maybe it's just my opinion". this is supposed to be something think 'this would look more pleasing.' to me. Dialogue: ."I see this a lot.' and I don't know why. "Why not do it like this?" Regarding characters I'll go to in later. [2⭐ Here] 2- Story Development: At first it was great for me, specially the first chapter. But then most things seemed forced or unnatural like him having everything he needs(sugar daddy God for the win) and the author even mentioned it was (plot). For someone who was given lots of money he could've easily went out and bought stuff he needed and it would've been interesting to see him interact with the world. There are other things that I could point out but it would be too much hard work. [3⭐ Here] 3- Character Design: I could talk about the MC but there are also lots of inconsistencies in almost all the other characters I've seen so far compared to their OG selves but it's fanfiction so it could be their default behavior. Going back to the MC for someone who lived +50 years he's doesn't act that mature and it even be attributed to teen hormones because he has lived as one for more than a week. Even if he was a warmonger or battle junkie outside of those situations he should be more idk, try picturing a gamer mind influenced character. That's how I imagine a war veteran and most powerful man of his world to be like, someone who only gets excited when he's fighting because the rest isn't as trilling. Anyway that's my opinion. [3⭐ Here] 4- Update Stability: I added the book today but from the date of the postings the chapters seem to be consistent. But there was a period where there weren't being posted so it could be something personal. [5⭐ Here] 5- World Background: The world is introduced as DxD would so we have a general understanding of it but the author also mentions the scenes which is good but there's not enough detail for it to paint a picture. Specially for someone who watched DxD a long time ago or hasn't even watched it. [4⭐ Here] [Overall: 3.4] Well my recommendation for those who just found the book is to give it a try, because what might not work for me might be tolerable or might work out for you. I'm still going to read a bit more, need to get to the first +18 scene to know if it's even worth keeping going.

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