its alright but not for me the author just zooms by in the story. it would be a better story if the author just slowed down a little took his time and let us explore a little.

I think this fanfic is little bit different from the general webnovel fanfics. The relationship between the MC and the other charachters are actually good and well written except from Freya. We know Freya is cracked in the head but the history between Freya and alchemy could be revealed a bit more without losing the mystery element, that way we readers can understand Freya's actions. Grammar is decent although there are some missing words, it is passable. This fanfic actually used mystery element quite well and it makes readers curious about the history of this world (I know this is Danmachi fanfiction but the world is altered a bit).

In this review I will sum up what you should expect in this fan fiction. I gave myself 4.2 starts instead of five because there are things I still have to improve. First this is a harem story with 5 love interests which have already been decided. 1. Artemis 2. Hephaestus 3. Rose Fannett 4. Ryuu Lion 5. Riveria Ljos Alf Grammar: It took a while for me but I was able to improve my writing as the story went on you cal look at the highlighted reviews as proof you'll some mistakes here and there but it doesn't put you away from the immersion. Story: The story is a bit fast-paced but I aim to slow it down a little to improve on the world in the next volume along with the history of alchemy in danmachi. Character: I took the time to write good relationships between the MC and the other characters everyone has some time in the story for themselves, Freya too though I don't like her character I will make her better in the next volume. Update stability: I gave myself 4 stars I'm now aiming to release 3 times a week on Monday Tuesday and Friday maybe some surprise extra chapters when I have the time to write.

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Grammer mistakes and sentences that make zero sense. Follows typical path of the original. MC contradicts himself and made me drop when he tried to awkwardly tried to guess Ryu's personality. I literally closed it and just decided to forget ever reading such cringe. secondly, the fight with ottar as level 1 and diving in dungeon just after arriving in the world makes zero sense. The MC knows danmachi but still goes to hostess of fertility. He also should know that he can't lie to gods. The premise would have been 100 times better if his alchemy was unique. The author also gives no reason and keeps foreshadowing something about alchemy that also doesn't make sense in such a fast paced novel. Worldbg also doesn't makes sense since nothing about alchemy and it's stigma. Why should Hephaestus have anything to do with alchemy and what is the correlation between her eye patch and his alchemy? Read at your own risk and sanity.

Not for me but it is okay.

Cheap drama all time 1 Star ..............................................................................................................................................

Read till Chapter 6. Writing Quality - 5/5 - Good writing quality. Story Development - 4/5 - Has quite a striking similarity to the FF 'My upgrades are invincible'. Yet, this story is not a cheap knock-off but using similar storyline in a slightly different manner. Good job, if Author is going to make it multiverse story, please do not make it similar to the aforementioned FF (i.e. Lord of the rings, Demon Slayer, Harry Potter, etc.) rather go in Anime route, let him go to FMA universe or something 😅 (Just suggestion, nothing else). Character Design - 5/5 - Pretty stable design I guess, too soon to comment on this. Updating Stability - 3/5 - ??? (Will change this to 5/5 only when constant updates happen and number of chapter exceeds 30) World Background - 5/5 - Now here, Author has made it very different from the aforementioned FF with introduction of Alchemists and some guild for them in Danmachi. Hope this FF continues, great work author!!👍🙏

Great fic. I like it so far. Also, the harem selection is very interesting as well. If I would change anything, it would probably be adding a little more action, but other than that I really like the story.