whelp I rarely live ratings seems like a waste of time especially when it's a story that's Horrible but I see potential in this story and like the flow keep it up

The chapters are pretty much short. But The Fanfic is amazing. Hope you make the chapters longer. ..:88:&;83;98;&;&;&;&;&;&;&;&;&;& Djdkfkdmfj

Although the author is a beginner, and has a lot to improve in the matter of plot, but there is a point that I like very much in this story, there are several naruto stories out there, but the author has managed to create something new, and this should be valued, take my 5 stars.

Well there are only three chapters for now, but it feels very interesting and the writing is pretty good too. Looking forward to it. lets gooooooo

overall it's really good absolutely perfect if you like a dark story with an evil MC the problem is it's just not for me I give things like this try and be like do I like it do I not and i'mma be A hundred with you chief this is really good it's just not for me so I recommend giving it a try anyway you might like it

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The main problem as far as I can see it, is the irrelevance of character development in this story. While everyone loves a good powerwank, myself included, it takes the thrill of a story away. The writing is good. Few, if any, errors in spelling or grammar. Could do with longer or more detailed paragraphs. Working within a framework for the plot might prove to be a better, if not entirely novel approach to the story. All that matters is that the Author enjoys writing it. Keep up the good work.

The chapter are short but the idea is interesting the thing i enjoy the most is using the shop for more then himself i really want to see more and i enjoy different power systemes in different worlds.

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