Review Detail of Zelphyr in DREAMING THROUGH HELL

As I way saying in the synopsis- well.. not these upcoming words exactly but eh... anyway, I do not care for ratings as I am only doing this for fun and experience, as I both love reading and writing... along with gaming and other things, but that is of no importance, anyways once again... if you like my book and want more of this please do tell me, and if you want to write a critique then also please do so, because any feedback (even if negative) helps me improve as a writer and that is what I want. Look above, that is an example of an improper paragraph: it is too long and bulky, and look before this paragraph, there is no space? That is an example of improperness too, you need to add spaces to help show that it is a new paragraph too, anyways.. off I go! I only added five stars to have this comment on top by the way.. haha seeya again!