Writing Quality 5 Development 3 Everything else 5... You a an expressive writer and a good one at that๐๐พ, your style is very enjoyable and with little to no errors... The problem here however is that one as expressive and analytical as yourself should at least make the chapters longer so that we can at least see progress. Honestly it gets annoying if if you have an opinion on everything and good ones too at that, but that must not hinder the development of the story... Your character interactions as well as inner thoughts are perfect and enjoyable , but they should not hinder the development of the story... The only time it is nice to read an expressive writers story is when their chapters are longer so that at least we do not end up reading many chapters but seeing little progress... I'm saying the same thing in different ways to emphasize how annoying it gets in the long run... Otherwise great fanfic man.... Overall 4.6
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LIKEThanks for the review! I actually haven't noticed this myself, it's probably because as a reader and author we don't have the same perspective, by this i mean you read the novel all at once one chapter after another, while for me, I write it chapter per chapter and I never look back, I think I may need to 'read' my own work to get a better understanding of the situation you spoke of. Thanks again for the Review! I really need more reviews like this one to discover my 'mistakes' and improve as an author, after all I am still a newbie :p