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2022-03-03 15:14

Good plot. I really like the character names. The story starts smoothly and the pacing was mostly stable. The grammar though, could be better. Some sentences were awkward but overall not a bad experience. I wish the author would expand on the details a bit more.

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Greatly appreciated all the corrections and advice <3 I'm already eager to work on it. Thank you for this review as well.

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You're welcome.

Aeipathy_02:Greatly appreciated all the corrections and advice <3 I'm already eager to work on it. Thank you for this review as well.
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