Review Detail of HaruHaru24 in Angel Has Fallen Down

Hello everyone! I've been working on this story about 5 years now and been improving it time to time, I've publish this story on another platform but it was in my mother language, it's my first time to write a novel in english, honestly, i'm not really confident with my english, and it basically feels like my first time again on writing a story. I hope everyone can leave a critic, suggestion, & some honest review to improve either my grammar or my way to express the character and story. Thank you!