Well, I really like the writing, or maybe it is called the narrations. The way the author portrays the characters is splendid, each of them has a different vibe and personality. The story's pace in another way is a bit slow, for me, but it is okay considering the atmosphere, suspension, and dark color of the world. One thing that makes me curious about is the name of Ouroboros itself. I got the feeling it was just not about the "sleeping snake" at the best of their spine.

Incredibly well written, the quality of the descriptions and world building are on par with some of the best novels I've read, but I feel that there are some chapters that strike more deeply than others. The action sequences however, are on a whole nother level and I enjoy reading every chapter so much. The way the story progresses is also very interesting, and retains a lot of originality, leaving me in suspense for the next chapters. The author also did a really good job on the characters, while some of them may be somewhat generic, their personalities are very accurately depicted by their actions and dialogues. As a fellow writer, I can feel that a lot of hard work has been put into writing this and I just want to say, I absolutely love this. Keep the good work up, man! I can wait for the next chapters :)

the author does an amazing job conveying the environment, feelings and going ons of the main character. This novel pulls you in and won't let go. Will definitely be continuing this one! I love the style of writing and the fluidity of the story.

Mind Linker by BlackSnow11 is a dark tale of demon possession. The author is quite skilled at setting the scene and pulling the reader into the dastardly plot. Her descriptions are easy to follow, and the story’s pacing is well-balanced. While this the plot is action-driven, the author took the time to develop the characters, which made it easy to relate. The romance element is rewarding and a nice thread within this compelling fantasy. If I had to pick the story's weakness, I would say it is the first chapter. While I recognize it is necessary to introduce the MC to the reader prior to jumping into the action, of all the chapters, the first chapter felt choppy and a bit off balance. Readers who stick with the story will be treated to an edgy read that is well worth their time.

The narrative power is great! The story has a decent pace to enjoy, but not very impactful to hook if using web novel as it is media. It would be better if it being published as a book.

First off i want to start by commending your writing skills its so well done. A big thumps up on that overall everything is really good. Might just be a bit too slow for me But 5/5

This is Truly Good writing. Fleshed out characters and villain design. Serious and humorous all at the same time. Enough suspense to keep you on the edge of your seat. MC isn't op right away. He seems special but I can't tell because all of them are still pretty normal. Either exciting chaps hope you continue. This has the potential to be a top fantasy novel on this site. No exaggeration.

The story is awesome the best part is that characters don't seen one dimensional..Most fanfic have side characters that are written as if they live for the MC's sake...Over all great writing quality...Story development is great...Update stability character design are awesome as well....

Good, good and good. The writing quality is good, so is the story so far, well so far is just 3 chapters, but I think this is going to be a great book if it continues like this. Also, if you want to read a full blown fantasy read my book, Dance with the Nightingale 😉

I think that the novel has a lot of potential. The narrative and details are great and fun to read. If I had to give a criticism I would only say the paragraphs are a bit long, but everything else is really great!