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1AMLv112yr
2022-08-13 01:06

The Raw passion of the author was visible in every word. But his grasp on grammar and the writing method is what undoes his efforts. But it seems like the author is learning and improving. But unfortunately the author needs (I don't have any authority to say this) to rewrite or revamp the novel a little bit. Story and concept wise, it's cool and has a lot of potential, so I really hope the author succeeds in his first novel.😇

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1AMLv11

To be honest, the synopsis hyped me a lot, that I had some unfair expectations on this novel. Maybe the writing style is not for me, or maybe I'm just not accomodated with this style of narration (I never properly read a novel with present tense narration)

KARMA_7
KARMA_7Author

I'm gonna end the 1st season very soon, and after that I am thinking of rewriting the chapters before 17, but it will take some time because right now, I have a lot of things going on, like college, entrance, study, not enough time for story, some time to work on myself, like gym, and I like to study human psychology, so right now I'm cutting up on so much, but I'll rewrite it... thnx buddy....

1AM:To be honest, the synopsis hyped me a lot, that I had some unfair expectations on this novel. Maybe the writing style is not for me, or maybe I'm just not accomodated with this style of narration (I never properly read a novel with present tense narration)
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1AMLv11

It's your novel, bro and also your first novel. I get it. I wish you all the best!

KARMA_7:I'm gonna end the 1st season very soon, and after that I am thinking of rewriting the chapters before 17, but it will take some time because right now, I have a lot of things going on, like college, entrance, study, not enough time for story, some time to work on myself, like gym, and I like to study human psychology, so right now I'm cutting up on so much, but I'll rewrite it... thnx buddy....
KARMA_7
KARMA_7Author

thanx man

1AM:It's your novel, bro and also your first novel. I get it. I wish you all the best!
KARMA_7
KARMA_7Author

hey man, by far you have been a big help so just wanted to know ur opinion on the new ch I'm gonna drop today, I tried working on grammar, paragraph, and sounds

1AM:It's your novel, bro and also your first novel. I get it. I wish you all the best!
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1AMLv11

I'll let you know my opinion about it😇

KARMA_7:hey man, by far you have been a big help so just wanted to know ur opinion on the new ch I'm gonna drop today, I tried working on grammar, paragraph, and sounds
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