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Silent_Listener
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2022-02-24 11:50

Good going Kirti. Keep it up. All the very best for your competition. Do complete this story, please. The story is really good so far.

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Kirtirajput
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Thanks Silent. Please do continue reading.

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The writing was a bit confusing at the start as many names were introduced at the same time. I couldn't imagine the setting and the characters fast enough, maybe because I'm not used to Indian names, and couldn't tell the exact gender whenever a name popped up? Or maybe because the paragraph started with a speech and introduction of the character later? Probably. Overall, the reading experience wasn't the smoothest, due to the things mentioned above, I had to reread a scene a few times to fix the initial images I had in my head. Like when the MC started to speak, I first imagined her as the chairman, then when the soft female voice was mentioned, I erased the chairman and imagined his secretary. What a shocker it was to know that she was in reality the CEO. So yeah, I had to reconstruct the scene in my head a few times, haha. The mood was set up nicely, I could imagine the feelings the characters portrayed through their speech during the meeting. Even though the scene suddenly switched to the first narrative I didn't mind as much, at least I got to know who is the Main Character. She gives off strong female vibes, which is only a plus for me. The switch between the tenses could be off-putting for some English geeks, but I don't mind as much. I can't tell much about the chemistry between the ML and FL, but from what I saw so far, both seem like very proud people. The dynamics should definitely satisfy some drama and comedy-seeking readers. Continue writing and never give up! Fighting!

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