Review Detail of TreacherousVoid in Overlord: Reborn as an NPC
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The story is good, and it could have….no, it SHOULD have been great. The author however, continuously destroys his story for 13/18 chapters (thats as far as ive read) by making the MC A terrified, whiny, crying, shaking in his boots, overly cautious, complaining, garbage can of a human being I want to gouge my eyes out for half of each chapter before being able to get back into the story, and then the cycle repeats with the next chapter. The author stated he was a freshman in highschool so, i suppose i shouldnt be suprised. The story is still worth reading, just be aware that youll be causing yourself pain whilst doing so. BUT as they say! No pain, no gain!
Overlord: Reborn as an NPC
Delusion10
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Lol of course ill continue to read, the story is only 18 chapters in and I havent read a story on this site yet that wasnt “rocky” to say the least, at the very start. I hope theres a clear character development and hopefully its the good kind 😂 (Just a suggestion, but let the MC have a bit of pride as well. He seems to have no self confidence and it shows) P.S. i said PRIDE, not arrogance lol
Delusion10:Thanks for the review! Those issues are something I do want to fix within the next chapters! I hope you'll continue to read and give feedback so I can improve my writing and storytelling. These are the types of reviews I'm looking for :)