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GonadSmasher08
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2022-03-17 21:11

WRITING QUALITY though there some grammar error here and there. some missing words. but overall it is quite good . . . STABILITY OF UPDATES not regularly . . . STORY DEVELOPMENT needs a lot of work. . battle scene needs more details . what happen why did the MC transmigrated . how come the researches chooses the most absurd way on how to study the new species that appears . what is the cause or how the island appear . . . CHARACTER DESIGN little to none . most action doesn't have any reason why it was done. . . . WORLD BACKGROUND too little details on world background . not even describing on how big is the island . how the environment is distributed . was there pokemon in the ocean . can the pokemon escape the island on their own . . . P.S. please make the pokemon fight without the "MASTER" commanding them. it goes against your portrayal that pokemon are "SMART" the "MASTER" commanding them makes the story lame . . Please don't give them "POKEBALL" giving them pokeball solidify the "MASTER-SLAVE" relationship . if you treat somebody as your friend, you must not have a control in their freedom. if you can restrict their freedom or even their life, no matter how strong your feeling of friendship for that someone, it is not a real friendship it is "MASTER-SLAVE" relationship

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