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lyoinLv113yr
2022-02-22 20:15

there are many things wrong with this fanfic. the obvious nerf. if you think about it, there are many people that can kill a Viltrumite in Marvel. even the sorcerer supreme can do it in less than 3 seconds. or perhaps send him into the mirror dimension. the whole power issue seems like the author wanted him "work hard on gaining power". this is something we have seen done multiple times in countless other stories. the relationship with Aunt May... okay, this is a personal one. I do not like it. I feel like you wanted him to get involved with peter somehow by all means. I can't even count the number of fics that do that. they always either want the main character to be a mentor or his best friend I guess here the author is going for "Daddy". like if that really means something to us readers. The pacing. I actually do encourage you guys to read it to better understand.

Viltrumite in the MCU

OneYellowBoi
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15 Chs

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KuroYami
KuroYamiLv3

bounded by worlds but the world is more dangerous and even its inhabitants many have crossed that line with the existence of untrained billionaire playboys who can become heroes with just armor and even turn ordinary humans into sentry who might even destroy the earth with just a serum super warrior.

3yr
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KingSeyer
KingSeyerLv13

The story is good and all but there is something that may bug some readers like myself. In this story mc is nerfed and the author made it sound like it was the universe's will to limit his capabilities. The main reason someone will read this novel is because there is an alien who is capable of destroying planets as the mc so if His capabilities have been reduced then I dont see the appeal of this novel.

3yr

Tiny_Tim_5672
Tiny_Tim_5672Lv14

Reveal spoiler

3yr
MrSheta
MrShetaLv10

I don't understand how you take away its power... I don't understand that logic, it's a tremendous buff... There are also several actions taken that could have been done in another way, but hey.

3yr
OneYellowBoi
OneYellowBoiAuthor

The shameless author here, I'm giving myself some review to start :D I hope everyone enjoys what I have to write. So far, I have a few ideas for the story but it would be nice to have some more. Please tell me your thoughts.

3yr
Lenny_Lake
Lenny_LakeLv4

So a story about à viltrumit but without the mighty strenght eh…. I mean what is gonna attract the reader is seeing a viltrumite not some whimpish guy

3yr
Fox_king_1789
Fox_king_1789Lv5

I havent started reading it but the idea is already used once or twice before but they always drop it before 10 chapter and i hope that you dont do the sane because this idea cab work very well if you persevere even if the plot gets a little shaky it will still work.

3yr
Jornamin
JornaminLv4

Viltrumite is nerfed like this he will get soloed by everyone pathetic , buff him up and stop making poeple know more about his race the guy on wattpad writes a better story than this .

1yr
Jeebies
JeebiesLv1

only 8 chapters so far but the MC actually feels like an viltrumite and not a human with powers. no grammatical errors and such so good job author

3yr
BAD_MAN
BAD_MANLv11

This is actually good! We'll see if this viltrumite fanfic will last long cause other authors who write viltrumite fanfics make 2 chapters then drop it without informing readers.

3yr
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