I should have given this a full fledged five but I have a few issues with the writing of this fanfic: 1. Writing Quality: Though it is good that author wishes to make it sound more british if he writes dialogues in their way of talking... but it sounds really complex and more than that, it is sometime wrong and bothers readers... for example, Padma patil will soon see the effects of the work that little luna and I have done... see she did. That's not right and and it really bothers me personally when I am reading such a good story... 2. Story development: The story is going smooth like in actual movie... I appreciate that... but sometimes... the scene changes...you separate it using 'End Scene' line but still it take quite few paragraphs to understand the situations like where mc is, and who is he talking to, what he is talking about...(again writing improvement is needed) 3. Character Design: This is my personal opinion... I noticed that MC went through a lot in his previous life, he craved family, friends, wealth, health and support but died...In this world, he has family, friends, mentor, supporters, wealth and love too but he still doesn't open up to them let alone connects. So for me, he still doesn't feel relatable as he doesn't relate to them either. I think he should have more conversations with other characters rather than your opinions(which is obvious that you will put there) or the things he is thinking in his brain(long sentences makes him look more calculative in relationship which he shouldn't be in my opinion). Just think if he doesn't think so much and just do (maybe he thinks that way but you don't need to always explain why he is going to do this) Upadating Stability: Everyone wants that new chapter should drop regularly...(increase the frequency please) World Background: As we have already seen movies or read novels we already know the hp world and you do justice in this part... Speciality of this webnovel ie why is it good? 1. It has good plot 2. It has some separate situations/stories of other side characters... writer has shown a little creativity there. 3. It is short but reading it still fulfills you... I thought it has so less chapters but when I started reading, it took so long to complete a chapter...(maybe I was reading it two times to understand) 😂 (joke) yeah that's all... so I hope the author will do this fanfic justice and read this review in a positive remark and give us better and better reading experience... so that at the end of the novel I would give it 5 stars again.
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LIKEOh my, an actual constructive review, is it my birthday? Just kidding, thanks for taking the time to give us your opinion, it really helps out. I know that the writing feels a bit off, though it's mostly because I'm more familiar with French than English and often mistranslate sentences like see she did. (That's an actual way of saying stuff.) I struggle with keeping a stable update schedule, but I'm working on fixing it. Ideally, I would update at least twice weekly while keeping a good writing quality and 2K words. Again, thanks for the review buddy.