good story and I can see this improving but My only issue is the tense being used and some random info inserted in a bracket. tho it can be improved with time but a strong grammatical background is important for the story development. but anyways all the best author!! you have my support.
Kihitakamy
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LIKEKihitakamy:Thanks brother, from the beginning my intention was to progress story, narrative and writing with time, it's my first adventure with a story that isn't horror so I'm a little lost, but with time I will improve! thanks for the support.
bluexubyung:no worries am there to help! ^_^ lol and its sister haha but no worries