Story development and world building are both decent in the early chapters of the story, giving the reader information about the system and a little about the world itself. The author also seems to consistently update the book well. Writing quality could be improved, specifically punctuation / grammar.
MoonThief
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LIKEI'd recommend downloading a proofreading tool, such as Grammarly. Most should provide basic grammar checks for free.
MoonThief:Yeah i have noticited how bad my grammer is i might have to hire an editor
Stormzz:I'd recommend downloading a proofreading tool, such as Grammarly. Most should provide basic grammar checks for free.