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2022-02-07 01:56

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To Be The Devil's Daughter: The Beginning

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Shink_a
Shink_aLv13

It's a nice story. it isn't hard to warm up to the characters, and the author did a good job in making them feel alive. Although author needs more editing to make the reading experience feel smoother. P.S. Still waiting for more chapters.

3yr

Rita_Chioma_9038
Rita_Chioma_9038Lv11

This is an interesting story and I love it especially that it has to do with the 'fate of darkness' Thumbs up author, keep up the good work.

3yr
savagequeen999517
savagequeen999517Lv1

What we have here is a masterpiece,mind blowing,well written, beautifully made work 👏👏👏👏👏 I am speechless I don't know what to say but what I know is I LOVE ITTTTTT!❤️ Don't quit!

7mth
xlntz
xlntzLv14

Hmm... The story's flow is cool. I like it. However, not sure why no one mentioning about the sentence structure? Normally, a sentence starts with a capital letter and ends with a period. But almost all sentences here start with small letters. Not sure why it's like that. Anyway, a simple auto-correct function will help in that... no big deal. Other than that, it's really nice concept as well since the author is doing his/her research well. keep it up!

2yr
Obaze_Emmanuel
Obaze_EmmanuelLv2

I love the setting of the story very intriguing I must say well done author 🙋🙋💯

5mth
Thalia_Ilace
Thalia_IlaceLv10

This novel has a lot of potential as the story itself is intriguing, however, I do believe it needs a lot of work to reach that potential. A lot of the sentences tend to ramble and are very repetitive and while this is something that can be utilized to amplify the tension or feeling in a scene or dialogue, that was not done properly here. There's also a lot of telling instead of showing. I felt like as soon as there was any sort of question on anything that had me curious, that curiosity was squashed when the information was given right after. The flow felt quite jagged due to the above mentioned as well which made reading along feel like quite a drag despite the essence of the story being very intriguing so it felt very unfortunate and frustrating because I WANTED to read more but it felt really difficult to do so. Character descriptions were practically non existent for the characters other than Lust (and I liked that his description was simple but painted a clear picture in my head with only a few words). It also is a bit confusing because Persephone marries Hades in usual mythology and it seems like this novel tends to follow that, however, Hades and Satan are not the same person/do not have the same origin. Satan rules over Hell and Hades rules over Hades/the Underworld but the Underworld is not the same place as Hell. Satan is an angel who opposed God and is a ruler of evil, while Hades is a God who rules over the land of the dead. So it seems you mixed/confused two different pieces and while I do think this is something that is doable, I don't feel it was executed correctly with the set up. The first chapter is a "prologue" so I thought that Chapter 2 would jump right into the plot in the summary, but instead of the prologue being contained to the first chapter, it was dragged out to many chapters after. I think it would be better to change these chapters to the auxiliary volume for the complete prologue, or this part of the plot should be made apparent in the summary since it's such a drastic change from what the summary explains. I think that these are quite easy fixes and just need some polishing so don't give up. This novel has a lot of potential! You can do it author!

7mth
Stina_Sia
Stina_SiaLv1

I read your stories and really enjoyed it, If I may give my feedback, the topics you choose are very interesting, and I hope you continue creating such amazing stories, also i have some ideas for you

7mth
yukides_
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