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Very_Passon
Very_PassonLv42yr
2022-08-11 00:14

This is more of a question than a review. I read many novels on this app and I just cannot stand bad grammar.Im on chapter 5 and i wanna ask if the writing gets at least a little better cause if not, then im afraid i will have to drop this.(im not an english speaker myself so i understand some errors, i probably messed up something in my review as well, but just cant stand first chapters)

The Fox Goddess

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725 Chs

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Very_Passon
Very_PassonLv4

Ok i checked some later chapters and it seems like in chapter 30 its better and in 80 is pretty good so i will have to force myself to read to get to that point. Im glad cause everything beside grammar is pretty well done

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Klyscha
KlyschaLv5

I'm going to start reading now, and I appreciate your question and answer at the same time it got me excited to start reading, so thanks.

Very_Passon:Ok i checked some later chapters and it seems like in chapter 30 its better and in 80 is pretty good so i will have to force myself to read to get to that point. Im glad cause everything beside grammar is pretty well done
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Very_Passon
Very_PassonLv4

I made this comment only taking a look at those chapters, its not really that good, but I can promise you that later grammar is good, just the way novel went was not for me, thats why I dropped it

Klyscha:I'm going to start reading now, and I appreciate your question and answer at the same time it got me excited to start reading, so thanks.
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Klyscha
KlyschaLv5

what do you mean? can you explain me?

Very_Passon:I made this comment only taking a look at those chapters, its not really that good, but I can promise you that later grammar is good, just the way novel went was not for me, thats why I dropped it
1yr
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Very_Passon
Very_PassonLv4

like why I dropped it? or the grammar

Klyscha:what do you mean? can you explain me?
1yr
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Klyscha
KlyschaLv5

yeah, why did you dropped it?

Very_Passon:like why I dropped it? or the grammar
1yr
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Very_Passon
Very_PassonLv4

Well It was some time ago so I don't remember that much, but most of the characters at least for me had no depth at all. The two companions she had at the forest became typical "little sisters" characters and stopped having any character growth, there is this one shy elf thats thirsting for our mc since she first saw her and all action at that point where I dropped it seemed focused on their little drama, she also had a child somehow? I saw that because i skipped a few chapters to see the grammar. All the other characters are basically enemies, annoying nobles, and weird elf fanboys who are jealous of mc. Well thats what it looked like to me, I may pick it up again tho, cause all these reasons are.pretty trivial and overall when the grammar got good it was pretty solid

1yr
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StreetLight_7925
StreetLight_7925Lv1

I'm sorry but the early chapters are in dire need of a rewrite. The quality is awful, the descriptions are simple, no punctuation, and grammar mistakes everywere. Reading ahead, the quality gets better. But as it stands, the early parts are way too painful to read.

2yr

Fox_Obsessed_Nerd
Fox_Obsessed_NerdLv11

yo, the book is quite fantastic, you did good on the character, and the background details are nice to, but what really got my attention was, DUN DA DA DAAA "the fox" books with foxes are my favorite. love you, love your book, and I can't wait for the next book or the next chapter

2yr
JM345678_7M
JM345678_7MLv15

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Reza2000
Reza2000Lv11

I read about 60 chapter, in the beginning its good, but the system explanation and the goddess part ruin it for me. The leveling part also not good, he cant get xp unless its stronger ruin it( she cant get xp from savage beast even tough she is a savage beast), also she is only savage beast but she can defeat essence lord( power scaling is off), no explanation about how normal beast advance?are they also have level?

2yr
OJM
OJMLv10

I don't know what to say I'm just tired of yuri if the male protagonist got reborn as female and wants girls instead of men I don't mind but the main protagonist is a girl should she at least have some kind of attraction toward men . I really like the main character she is strong , smart and merclic but why is she only attracted to women and I feel all men in this novel is incompetent, dumb and perverts only think about pretty girls even the king of the beast country is incompetent and weak I don't mind yuri but at least can't you add both men and female love.

1yr
Fu_Hua_
Fu_Hua_Lv4

Ok, I love it To the Library it goes!!!

2yr
Haku_Ouroboros
Haku_OuroborosLv12

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2yr
david_cuenca
david_cuencaLv2

parece buena además es Yuri ,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,z,,,z,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,z,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,

2yr
Lavolpe3
Lavolpe3Lv14

This is a very good book you should be very proud of it. There a couple of errors in it but nothing that will take away from the story. Therr is not a lot of fox store out there so please keep going. I hope it will be just like ”reincarnated as a fox with a system” and just as many chapters but please if you do drop this which I hope you don’t please tell us.

3yr
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