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2023-04-21 14:38

The overall story is pretty good. However at some point the lovey-dovey moments between the mc's is too much, pretty much waste potential scenarios. At the beginning the works of the fl is well described but what I'm most sad about is that the story didn't emphasis much on how the fl will develop an antidote for the ml which was the leading cause or goal of the story, and thus the ending was too rushed in just a few chapters which should have covered half the story. In addition, the revenge story was too short little description or too rushed. I don't know if it's because I read too many storied with more than 830 chapters, but this book is good and had so much potential to develop. But anyway, I cant say for sure if I'm satisfied but I have lukewarm feelings. The story is good yeah but..... lacks depth.....

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