Review Detail of riley_batchelor in It All Started With Lightning

This is the kind of real comment I want to see in the comments. Comments like this make me work even harder. But I have to say, you decided a little early. The reason for the slow start of the second volume is that our main character is overpowered compared to his peers. The world William lives in does not evolve with William. The world moves completely independently of William. The reason I write this way is because I want the MC(William) to hit the wall one day. From here on, there are SPOILERS for those who haven't read past the 170th chapter. For example, Azrauth. He is a very powerful being and William has encountered Azrauth several times. What if one day the real Azrauth shows up? When Mc wasn't strong enough. Azrauth is just an example, of course. SPOILERS OVER. Another thing I noticed and wanted to fix, especially in the second volume, is the side characters. There are twenty chapters that I haven't shared yet that I have ready. From here, you can see that I started to write more side characters. (A few chapters later) Also, I decided to go into some uncertainty not only with the side characters but also with the world-building. The D&D books I've been reading lately have inspired me. I especially like using longer sentences. I know that I have written a very long answer, and in the end, I would like to say that every comment is valuable to me, and I am sure that this comment that you made while I was writing will help me to write better. Thank you, with regards.