Review Detail of as_ss in A conqueror's game (got fanfic)

its just a pile of bs. Two 6 year olds talking like adults right at the start, I know this is a fanfic but I would expect the author to have a little bit more intelligence to realize that that's not how 6 year olds talk. the author ImmortalGorilla did something similar with his harry potter fic but he made it make sense unlike here