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2022-06-16 16:52

Writing Quality: So far that I've read, I've enjoyed all bits of the chapters. I found it hard to come across any form of error, which meant you took your time to edit your work, producing neat and organized writing. Though I almost got lost with the tenses, sometimes past, other times, present. But all in all, I loved it so far. Stability of Updates: Quite up to date at promised time! Story Development: Your story's pacing was a bit slow at the beginning but luckily, I came across your remark at the comment section where you stated the pacing was done on purpose to give readers time to connect with the MC. That's quite thoughtful of you. Actions were moderately and impressively well written when necessary. The entailed details in your descriptions were also very nice. Character Design: You took your time creating these characters with relatable backgrounds. That's very professional of you. World Background: All necessary notes were detailed in your descriptions and it transported me to those exact times. This is a great piece of professional work. I loved it so far.

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Author’s Note!! To everyone who is reading this at this moment, thank you! There were a few things I would like to say before you start reading the actual story: 1. “The JOKER” was inspired by the “Lord of the Mysteries” by Cuttlefish that Loves Diving. But hold your horses people! When I say inspired, I don’t mean “copy”. Rest assured that there will be no arcana cards, tarot club, fights between deities, etc. In short, I won’t be copying LOTM’s plot, just the transmigration trope. It’s just that as soon as I finished reading LOTM, all the emptiness I never knew existed within me suddenly resurfaced all at once. I had a hard time moving on with that story that I read it over and over again. While in the midst of my painful wait for book 2, I was hit by a sudden flash of inspiration and thus, giving birth to this story. But seriously tho, why does it sound like a romantic confession? Anyway, moving forward. 2. This story is slow-paced, especially in the beginning chapters. But not slow to the point that you would want to slam your head onto the wall due to the lack of events and excessive turtle pacing. I just wanted Jack Miller (the protagonist) to be relatable and have proper motivations for why he’s doing what he's doing. I don’t want him to dive headfirst into action while we don’t even understand him as a human being. I wanted him to be relatable, not easily forgotten, and have realistic motivation. Don’t worry tho, it may be slow-paced but I don’t like putting fillers in my stories. So you can be sure that every chapter has its own purpose. (though they may be short) 3. Though I mentioned suicide in the synopsis, I wanted to clarify this to you guys. I AM NOT GLORIFYING SUICIDE. I wanted to show the effect it has on the living left behind. Also, though there will be violence in the future, the protagonist will not, and will never become a mindless murderer. If ever he actually killed someone, it is not without reason. 4. Lastly, I am not a native English speaker. But I love writing stories. It’s a form of release for me. So please don’t be disappointed if ever you see grammatical errors and punctuation misplacement every here and there. To be honest, I edit the chapter multiple times before posting them (but they become shorter whenever I do because I remove the wordy sentences). I also use Grammarly and I plan to go on premium once I become a little bit richer in the future. But for now, please bear with it guys. If you see any errors, please do a paragraph comment and tell me it needed fixing (if it’s not too much to ask). Anyway, that’s all I have to say. Thank you so much, everyone! – Your beloved bunnyrabbit.

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