The writing quality is very good, with diverse word selection and near flawless grammar and spelling. However, I can't say I'm a fan, still I won't give it less than 4 as I believe that's a fair rating, taking into account my own tastes. My main problem is there isn't really any overarching plot, nor does the protagonist have any real goals beyond inventing stuff. This is fine if you just want a simple, easy going fic, but I was hoping for something more. There's no kingdom building, business building, world takeover, battles, rivals, etc. The protagonist is one of the strongest beings in the world, yet spends his entire time just working on tech that he doesn't really need, nor does he really use it beyond testing if it functions. The cycle is pretty much: get idea, make idea, show off idea to girls, go back to step 1, repeat ad infinitum. I have seen some reviews compare the protagonist to Tony Stark, and I agree with that, if Tony never actually used his inventions in any meaningful way. In over 100,000 words there have been 2 incredibly brief steamrolls and that's it. The girls are well written with their own distinct personalities, wants, and desires. Though I'd have liked some more balance, as when a new girl gets summoned there rest seem to get mostly relegated. Adult scenes are well written and aren't cringe inducing like many WN fics, they're well dispersed and spaced, with some nice variation too. Overall, it depends what you want in a fic. Well written slice of life, with an easy going plot and no real goals? This is for you.
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LIKEAlso forgot to say, I read up to chapter 25 and decided to take a break at this point due to the above reasons. Chapters are a very healthy length, so I estimate I've read around 100k words.
Good...since I literally wanted to complain that there is faction building, tech progress, politics like arranged marriage, mc's 'arrogance' force Hades acting early leading towards massive war 😑🤷🏻
I'm glad to hear that some heavier plot events start happening later, but I felt 100k+ words was enough to get a rough idea of a fic. I might come back to this later, if I do and my thoughts change, I'll delete this and add a new review. Good luck with your novel.
Well, yeah, since I prefer more of a 'human approach' in my writing. Developing tech until a certain point, and then Mc move out.No one goes to war without proper preparations. It may looked like a 'loop' but all of that had an end goal.Even if it looked that Marcus wasn't doing anything or has higher goal. His 'presence' in the world forces it shift. Like Hades acting early 🤷🏻
Yeah, I guess my problem is Marcus didn't personally have any obvious goal other than inventing. Sure, he created lots of cool stuff, but up until I paused, there didn't seem to be any tangible end goal or mission or objective beyond that. It sounds like his actions eventually had consequences, causing other characters to act... was that his objective? To force other's hands? Or was it simply to build power endlessly until something happened? If so, I think some inner monologues about that and more foreshadowing would have personally helped me and kept me invested. Not trying to sound arrogant, just giving honest feedback.
Sounds interesting, I'm glad theres some kingdom building and/or conquering going on. Like I said I'll probably come back to this in the future and re-review if my thoughts change. Thanks for the conversation, I appreciate you laying out some of your plans. Good luck with your novels.
