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Wallboii
WallboiiLv33yr
2022-02-05 14:07

It started good, then chapter 9 and 10 happened. Character development is fine, but it was too sudden without the proper build up. It felt very disjointed from the tone and direction of where i thought the story was going. The direction the character development took was also weird. That's all I could put in a review without explicit spoilers. If you haven't read the story and are looking at the reviews don't let this stop you from giving it a chance, you might like the direction it's going, it's very hit or miss.

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ArtoriaPendragon_
ArtoriaPendragon_Lv14

What happened in chapter 9 and 10?

Wallboii
WallboiiLv3

It gets all angsty and forced character development happens, from other comments I've seen it gets even worse later on.

ArtoriaPendragon_:What happened in chapter 9 and 10?
ArtoriaPendragon_
ArtoriaPendragon_Lv14

Yeah, just from skimming through the chapters I saw that it was pretty bad, thanks for being one of the only reviews that had legitimate criticism and wasn't just a bunch of 5-star spams.

Wallboii:It gets all angsty and forced character development happens, from other comments I've seen it gets even worse later on.
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