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2022-01-14 11:57

This is a good idea for a book and I love the dialogue between the characters. An upgrade would be to be more descriptive. I would to be able to visualize the different Elders and their powers. How does the different factions look and specify more of the the different roles of the Elders. I am genuinely looking forward to reading this and watch you improve on your writing.

Worlds of Atlan

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Yaminobands
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Im eager to see where the author takes this story. I was captivated by the tones that where set and felt like this could be a fun story to get lost in.

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Hey guys I'm a new writer trying to bring my imagination to life. This is an idea I've been sitting on for a while and I finally attained the discipline (lol) to put the proverbial pen to the paper. Please comment and your honest opinions on the story (please be brutally honest if possible) I'm here to learn and sharpen my craft. This series will be ongoing so stay tuned!!!!!!!!!

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