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I expected this book to have a lot of potential but your wasting. 1 the pacing is too fast, 2 your characterssss what happened to them, sure you tried to build on them but thats clearly not working out you didnt even give a backstory on asuras entire life in marvel you just skipped ahead like that also you didnt explain the world clearly and give us the readers enough info on what was happening..... My final verdict is that: 1) Your writing quality is bad from a story standpoint(your rushing things too much), im pretty sure your grammar is a mid to low rating. 2) Your world background is bad. 3)The story development is rushed and not planned at all it shows in your writing. If you planned everything out correctly and not just winged it like you did it would be much better. 4)Your chose marvel as your world use it! Try to give us more details, you don't need to rush it soo much. I was on the 9th? chapter(the avengers vs xmen chapter) stopped cuz it became annoying to read its just asura getting angry half of the time. Ps. I'm not tryign to discourage you from writing author im just rying to give constructive criticism so your future books would be much better; wouldn't mind reading this book again if you improve upon it or your other future books.

let how the world can take the Asura wrath.😁😊😊😁😁😊😁😊😁🌟⭐👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍

Nao tenha harém, eu acho perfeito só tendo 1 esposa...Eu achei interessante e gostei, sobre gramatica eu achei boa, com algumas pequenas falhas...

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20/10. Hay algunos problemas con la velocidad que todo transcurre. Pero al haber tanta historia en los comic desde civil war. Creo que la velocidad es aceptable. También me gusta que tomarás la ruta de los cómics, aunque se sentio demasiado rápido cuando agregaste a Rachel. Al menos con Laura hubo algunas situaciones que lo volvio algo orgánico. Pero al final del día gran trabajo, leeré cada capítulo cuando salga.