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Might have rated it more if I didn't read Lightning is the only way before this. I understand that the MC should have some flaws for character development, however, the flaws he demonstrates is just frustrating. He isn't decisive, which for the most part, is understandable since he was a 'normal human' before this. He doesn't plan ahead but gets saved by the author, it's annoying but it's bearable. He relies on his system heavily and complains when the system doesn't solve his problems. The combination of these three flaws makes him feel like a dumb OP Isekai protagonist which is more suited for character relief than for the role of the main lead. (Read Reverend Insanity to see what I mean by decisive) The power system in this novel is just down right confusing. At times they call it cultivation and at other times they call it magic. Also, what is the difference between a trainee mage and an adept mage? There seem to be no defining factor which differentiate the two except 'I am more powerful than you because my name sounds cooler', and if that is the case then why not just make it so that they're both part of the same major realm instead of separating them into two different major realms? The villains and side characters are all very two-dimensional. They seem to have no unique personality outside of their roles. The dark deity acts like your run-of-the-mill arrogant villain, the merchants all act like profiteers or act like they lost something in the deal and cry about it, the people in high society act like the world is entitled to them because they're in high society. It's just boring, I can skip the dialogues of the side characters and know exactly what they're gonna do. I recommend the author to read 'Lightning is the only way' and maybe 'All my disciples suck!' to improve upon their characters. PS: It ruins the immersion when the names of the characters from a certain region are all European and then a random Japanese name like 'Akane' comes out of nowhere.
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Well, for your first point, introducing MC's backstory in the first 40 chapters is a bit too much. And as for the heavily reliant on system, nah, he ain't. Probably in the first few chapters, of course, cuz he needs some damn help. That's like a 'tutorial' session for a new player when they play a new game. You want him to become a lord almighty after 5 chapters? Go read some chinese stuff. That ain't gonna happen here. The power system is not explained in the early chapters because why would I? There's no point doing so and the problem of how to fit it in that early part of the story. Otherwise, the first 40 chapters would just be full of useless info dumps here and there. As for the villains... I don't understand why should I spoonfeed readers about all information at once. And the 2-dimensional argument, where did that came from? Maybe we should try to re-define what a 2-dimensional character is. If you really know what I'm trying to do, then I guess you should be able to understand the rest of the story then, and your rating would be very different... Whew, readers gonna be arrogant after reading a lot of stories, thinking this one is similar to the rest. But I guess it is what it is then.
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