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Night_Crawler619
Night_Crawler619Lv142yr
2022-01-17 21:37

ohhkayyy now that we're 5 chapters in I think it's time to review the story so far The writing improved a lot in just 3 chapters. The story is well thought and the premise is yet to set in but the thing we could all agree on is that the story have potential. Characters are still being introduced but I liked the detailed description so far. Story is developing at a good phase. Here is my 5 star for now, KEEP IT UP AUTHOR 🥰 Will update the review after few more chapters.

Astrix-Ancient lands

Heavenly_Cloud
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Heavenly_Cloud
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Thanks a lot for the review

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Einstaral_pearl
Einstaral_pearlLv2

To be honest the novel has quite potential , just wish that author doesn't drop it or ruin the flow😅, also quite a difference in quality could be seen as chapter progress

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CalmDaoistLee
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The story is structured quite well, and the dialog is attention grabbing. It seems if the people in the book are really there. Other than that the book has no grammar issues that I can see, so that makes the story quite easy to read which adds to the want to progress deeper into the book.

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leoreview1
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Hey there! Good day for writing! If you wanted to see whether you can get paid by distributing the current work or getting financial support by writing new work, you might want to contact leozhan2020*@*gmail.com (please ignore both * when sending email). A brief introduction, some sample chapters or links will be appreciated when reaching out.

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T1me_2_Dr1nkBl3ach
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Worldbuilding is pretty good, But my main problem is I hate the mc because sounds like a predator when talking about his 10-year-old sister. It's decently funny and enjoyable to read.

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Sakshi_4401
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It was quite good , good storyline ,had a lot of fun while reading it.............................................................................

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Lancee
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There is still much unknown, I'd like to know the plot, where the story leads. Is there any force that the main character is supposed to overcome and if so how will he do it and is the force so big that it plays a huge role on the direction of the storyline. So far the story development is blurry but since it's only three chapters it might show itself. But the use of dialogue is pretty good, there is space to grow. Overall a story with potential.

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