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2022-07-09 17:37

it's really really good but it has an updated in 5 months so I'm going to give it the score is everything else is just perfect but the updates could use some work

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For those who know me, will know that I'm here for Jean's sweaty back, Ganyu's horns and cocogoat milk, and Mona's tights. And this author sure knows how to bait me. What's there to say even. The novel is here for having fun. (Inside Joke) But in all seriousness, the author has years of writing on his back so it's bound to be another unforgettable piece of literature on this terrible, terrible Website that's full of plague. Writing Quality - Author has more than two years of writing experience. Gloriousm*lfhunter's expertise includes persuasion techniques such as, Older Women Baits, Goddess Baits, and Harem Baits at his disposal. This work is written in past tense, featuring a third person like any normal human author would. - 5 Stars out of 5 Stars Stability of updates - Hopefully every day, so far it seemed a bit random but it's bound to be every day once the fic picks up on collections and views. Give him some love. Chapter length varies, but it's generally above 1.5K words per page. Much longer than mine at least. - 5 Stars out of 5 Stars Story development - Currently, only a few chapters are out, but knowing him, it's bound to be great. The story starts off slow first few chapters, which some may dislike, some may not, give it a chance and perserve for the greatness to come. Orion the chocolate factory man soon gets transported into Teyvat, the world of Genshin Impact. His powers are op but no spoils. Author's idea of harem so far seems to revolve only around a few members such as Mona, Jean, Ganyu and Beidou, but it's bound to expand in the future, just like the universe. Unending, Uncontrollable and yet, so beautiful. We are all part of this universe. It sounds surreal but is true that outside our earth, the universe is expanding at the speed of light.It has been calculated that if there was a particle in space, and its position was measured with some accuracy, then after few minutes it would be found to be shifted by an amount greater than the distance traveled by light in those few minutes. This stretching results from two forces acting on it: The first one is gravity of this man's b*lls, that pull everything together; this force decreases with increasing distance like what we experience on earth. And second is the terrible energy of his profile pic and dark past, which pulls everything apart; this force increases with increasing distance like what we feel when we get into space. Creating a masterpiece of a novel incarnated by his wounded heart. - 5 Stars out of 5 Stars Character design - Orion is a great chocolate bar and everyone should eat it at least once in their lives. A guaranteed Slovakian/Czech Republic chocolate delicacy. - 500 Stars out of 5 Stars World background - Jenshin Impact, underrated for fics, there is no competition up here where I am, compete with me. - 5 Stars out of 5 Stars ******** Pros: ******** - M*lfs. - Aunt. - Harem. - Mona's thighs and wet tights. - Jean's back and armpits sweat. - Ganyu's cocogoat milk, horns and tight bodysuit. - Not a p**sy MC. - Sick MC name, would eat again. - Some fun later on, in the chapters with the girls. (Most likely.) - Good grammar which is a surprising feat on Webnovel, if you look at top fifty best ranking for fics. - Author is a cutie irl, don't ask how I know... ******** Cons: ******** - Sometimes, the paragraphs are way too long, but if you're his reader you already got used to it. Don't complain. - The author let's loose of way too much data/info from skills and his spells into the void, making it a bit confusing for non-english speaking readers that use google translate (If there are any), instead of confining it inside of a box with --------- in the beginning and at the end, and specifically showing he is talking about his skills and not just to himself. - Author does it for fun, it's currently unknown whether it will be dropped or not in the future. Spend some money on his P atreon and you might just get this story to run forever. Stick Swinger out.

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