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It's an excellent story. You should just add more descriptions and dialogue. Then it will be a better story. You should also make the character different from ost dxd fanfics by making him not interested in participating in the canon, where most characters go to highschool as a student or live in kuoh when there are plenty more opportunities across the world. Don't make him interested in romances and harems. While also making him preserve japanese culture.

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Muzan Kibutsuji in DxD

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Thank you very much for the criticism, your Suggestions are very important so that I can improve the story in general, about the dialogues, yes I know that I left a little "descriptive" too much, but I promise that in the next chapters I will invest more in the (povs) in first person. :)