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colbster303
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it's an Allright story if you made the characters more out there with personality then it would be good. you shouldn't just jump from one thing to another stuff needs to build up try having the mc actually have a personality don't explain all the happend tell him show give details

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Muzan Kibutsuji in DxD

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Well, the first time I write, it's easier for me to write the story in the third person, but of course, I'm increasing the first person interactions with each chapter. These things are learned with time, but thank you very much for the criticism, I am always willing to improve myself. :)

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it does have potential and I saw all the improvements through the chapter keep up the good work

CharAznable:Well, the first time I write, it's easier for me to write the story in the third person, but of course, I'm increasing the first person interactions with each chapter. These things are learned with time, but thank you very much for the criticism, I am always willing to improve myself. :)