Review Detail of Sunniestsea in Sweet Revenge For Young Master

Saw your book at the WPC and decided to give it a shot, I honestly love the cover, but the writing kinda seems dry or something. It's obvious English isn't the author's first language. The first paragraph was also dull, I suggest you show rather than tell and writing the sounds of certain stuff like the ambulance, tilt tilt, tap tap, weooo weooo isn't the best idea as it takes away readers emotion, I think it might work with tv shows but for writing Nah, some mistakes of tenses too as well as the dialogues doesn't seem natural to me at all. Nevertheless, I love the plot of revenge and reincarnation I think getting an editor is a must other than that the book is lit.