Review Detail of egg_mick_chicken in Gravity Falls: A Summer Full Of Mysteries... FINALLY!!!
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for first fanfiction this is excellent quality, at least compared to a lot of others. but as a fanfiction in general it could use some improvement. pacing's fine and I get the first 15 or so chapters were more about him training and getting strong and I like the little twists that existed like the one with Bill was pretty smart. I'm not sure if that's how it would actually work out with his deals, but interesting nonetheless though changing his name a at 25 without truly any reason. while he already told his name to everybody else, canonically is even a whole part where Soos is having trouble pronouncing Luffy. might want to eventually go back and edit that but you have the base for something really good here at least so far maybe not something on the level of freaking Harry Potter, but something great nonetheless
Gravity Falls: A Summer Full Of Mysteries... FINALLY!!!
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Buddy I don't think you fully understand but... he was only 6 years old. It took 6 years for Dipper and Mabel to arrive, I understand your point clearly, Stan gave him a real name not long after he started working for real 1 to 2 months but I wanted to make up for my delay so I made the next chapter a team skip and I'll give you some flashbacks if needed. Thanks for the comment, by the way, I was writing at this exact moment, I was in weeks of testing and I was exhausting with work but I still really enjoy writing to you, your comments fill me with strength. And I only look at the comments when I launch a chapter because I keep tearing myself up and brooding over taking so long to launch a chapter. Thanks for the incentives.
Arthur_Gameplay:Buddy I don't think you fully understand but... he was only 6 years old. It took 6 years for Dipper and Mabel to arrive, I understand your point clearly, Stan gave him a real name not long after he started working for real 1 to 2 months but I wanted to make up for my delay so I made the next chapter a team skip and I'll give you some flashbacks if needed. Thanks for the comment, by the way, I was writing at this exact moment, I was in weeks of testing and I was exhausting with work but I still really enjoy writing to you, your comments fill me with strength. And I only look at the comments when I launch a chapter because I keep tearing myself up and brooding over taking so long to launch a chapter. Thanks for the incentives.
egg_mick_chicken:oh yeah and add some more tags if you want to see more people look at it. I mean yeah too many tags would be a problem and it's starting out and all but I only found this by chance