The pacing of the story is pretty good, scenes don't drag for too long. The character's are somewhat fleshed out. The world could be expanded upon a little bit to give additional context, and the writing could be somewhat improved, but overall it's fine.
KAREN_DN
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LIKENo worries! Something I've realised is that the writing errors could be due to the translator used by WebNovel. If you didn't write it in English then you can just ignore my point about the writing since it's probably a translation error.
KAREN_DN:thank you dear for the constructive review! it really cheers me up to write more improvement than this. ^^