Review Detail of ShoeInk in Transmigration: From baby to teenager

So, read up to chapter six. My thoughts thus far: Writing quality: 4/5. Other than a few misspellings here and there, there's not much to complain about. Good use of grammar, attention to basic editing points, etc. etc. Story development: 2/5. Could definitely be better. Mostly "telling" vs "showing", which is a no-no. Describe your character's experiences through action and dialogue, not a wall of expositionary text. Character design: 3/5. Beyond the basic characterization in the first chapter, there isn't much to our MC. Quite stale, honestly. Not through any fault of her own, it's the lack of continuous interaction with anyone and missing plot points that could've been had. World background: 2/5: Mafia organization, school, and... removing tattoos? That's about all that I remember of it. When that's what your readers are thinking, there's something wrong that needs fixing. Overall, 3.2 is pretty reasonable. With a little work, it could go a long way, I think. Just not right now, though.