Review Detail of ysian in Cultivator With Modern AI
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48 chapters in, honest review This novel is as you would expect from a chinese eroge novel. The plot is still brewing in the background, mainly his supposed dead wife is already in the new world i think. To be honest, its just like dual cultivation but a bit worse. There isn't a clear goal for the MC. He did say become the strongest but this is a bit meh. To achieve this we can just expect plot reinforcement everytime. Things i don't like are: 1. Even though he's supposed to be strongest, he didn't dish out his immortal grades scriptures to have best foundation and body. 2. The females are really shallow. MC kisses his female family members and they are not repulsed but 'lose the strength to push him'?? Then they start to like him. There is no appealing or seducing them. This is especially unrealistic for the aunt who did not like him before and the aunt who had 2 kids and did not like incest. But one kiss subdued them. 3.The world powers are not really explained. There's already 4 main families written but no explanation to who is stronger. We also have that country's queen wandering to some pond with only one guard 2 times and the princess can also escape the palace and go right to MC family house without the queen knowing. Not very realistic. If you want some smut to pass time, then read it. It has many harem people..etc
Cultivator With Modern AI
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Author, imma be real, in no way am i trying to hate on this novel. What i've written are my opinions on way you write itself instead of the plot, so that you can use them when making other novels. 1. As you said, the MC was able to master many types of arts, he was the strongest (means already has peak experience), mastered alchemy..etc. Using this broad spectrum the ways he become stronger are countless. Moreover, since the new world and previous world are 99% similar, he may as well create all sorts of pills to become stronger. He should also have many immortal grade stuff since he is 'close friend' with the Queen of demons, i will assume his status was VERY strong. 2. The fact that Alice can cause females to become conscious of him whenever is lacking. Having read several smut novels, i found the ones where the MC appealed to the women better. Because when there is no big development in the relationships it is too easy. For example, you could have made the MC start dating the cousin and then, to keep an eye on them, the aunt is subject to seeing them doing 'stuff' together. This makes her conscious of MC while simultaneously having inner turmoil because of her late husband. 3. As the queen of a nation, especially a martial arts world where the strong reigns and many greedy opportunistics live in, you could expect other families lying in wait to take the chance to harm the queen and take her place. For a potential plot (i'll take it that she has only her daughter as child since she was only introduced) : you could have written that there are conflicts among the powerhouses who wants to pressure the queen to marry her daughter and take more power. That's why she was forced to break the engagement to avoid xie tian from being harmed especially after he became crippled. That would give empathy for her and us readers wishing for them to resolve the misunderstanding and get together. 4. As for the 'don't push it author' i wrote skulls at the end cuz i genuinely thought it was funny, i expected he had this system for whatever reason like always but the fact he created it was funny. Though still unrealistic. I just want a but of realism in fantasy novels. Especially since all chinese novels look the same with face-slapping and small relationship development. That's why i leave reviews, just wish for authors to create some gems later. When i first started reading i also liked these wuxia mangas/novels but now the stories always feel the same. For old readers we always want something unique like the author's pov where you can't expect what will happen or omniscient POV or Shadow slave..etc. Anyway i'm not saying that this novel is unreadable or anything, its up to par with other wuxia novels. Trust me i read some trash. Just you could always improve the story telling.
JosieGan:Sigh, another reader who doesn't read the plot clearly, and always wants an overpowered MC from the start. 1. Do you think the weak body that was previously crippled is capable of using Immortal Techniques directly? Body Foundation? Are you stupid? He has the Ancient Body Secret Technique, but you're saying he doesn't have any? 2. Xia Ning? She couldn't control himself because of the stimulant that Alice gave her! 3. Why did the queen bring so many bodyguards when I explained that she was the strongest in her country? And her aide was also one of the strongest. Her daughter escaped? Are you an idiot? Since when did Zhu Yuhe lock up his daughter? He can commute whenever he wants! Moreover, the MC is her ex-fiancé! And the queen family have a strong rationship with MC family! Main Family? I already explained that their strength is equal, and if another main family appear, I also explained it. 4. No clear goal? He wants to become stronger quickly ny dual cultivating, and you say that wasn't a goal? Or perhaps, the goal you want for him to conquer seven star world and other realm in an instant? Heh, I've met many readers like you .If you want overpowered MC fully supported by Immortal Techniques in an instant, you can go and read fan fiction. AI created by him you said I'm pushing it?image
Sigh, another reader who doesn't read the plot clearly, and always wants an overpowered MC from the start. 1. Do you think the weak body that was previously crippled is capable of using Immortal Techniques directly? Body Foundation? Are you stupid? He has the Ancient Body Secret Technique, but you're saying he doesn't have any? 2. Xia Ning? She couldn't control himself because of the stimulant that Alice gave her! 3. Why did the queen bring so many bodyguards when I explained that she was the strongest in her country? And her aide was also one of the strongest. Her daughter escaped? Are you an idiot? Since when did Zhu Yuhe lock up his daughter? He can commute whenever he wants! Moreover, the MC is her ex-fiancé! And the queen family have a strong rationship with MC family! Main Family? I already explained that their strength is equal, and if another main family appear, I also explained it. 4. No clear goal? He wants to become stronger quickly ny dual cultivating, and you say that wasn't a goal? Or perhaps, the goal you want for him to conquer seven star world and other realm in an instant? Heh, I've met many readers like you .If you want overpowered MC fully supported by Immortal Techniques in an instant, you can go and read fan fiction. AI created by him you said I'm pushing it?
As for the matter of the princess being locked up, i phrased it wrongly. Because she said she would be in her room but was able to leave the palace and travel from her place to MC's place. So escape=leave the palace. Because previously it was show she travels using a carriage and it does not make sense she travelled the distance at foot and arrived/ returned while the queen did not realise she was gone.
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Even if she left the palace, why should her mother forbid her? She can leave and visit everyone on her own whenever she want.
ysian:As for the matter of the princess being locked up, i phrased it wrongly. Because she said she would be in her room but was able to leave the palace and travel from her place to MC's place. So escape=leave the palace. Because previously it was show she travels using a carriage and it does not make sense she travelled the distance at foot and arrived/ returned while the queen did not realise she was gone.
See? This is the biggest problem in Volume 2. The Emperor want Zhu Yuhe to become his concubine, he even want to force her, and that's lead to the war!
ysian:As for the matter of the princess being locked up, i phrased it wrongly. Because she said she would be in her room but was able to leave the palace and travel from her place to MC's place. So escape=leave the palace. Because previously it was show she travels using a carriage and it does not make sense she travelled the distance at foot and arrived/ returned while the queen did not realise she was gone.
The point is you are too hasty to make a review, and your review is misleading because you missed too many plot. Especially like His Body Foundation!
ysian:As for the matter of the princess being locked up, i phrased it wrongly. Because she said she would be in her room but was able to leave the palace and travel from her place to MC's place. So escape=leave the palace. Because previously it was show she travels using a carriage and it does not make sense she travelled the distance at foot and arrived/ returned while the queen did not realise she was gone.
in realism, its dangerous mostly. Royalty needs to have a type of decorum. Rumors are bound to spread about the princess going alone to her former fiance's house. If pushing it a bit further, there should be mannerism between powerful households like messaging the other that they will come to their mansion for a visit. Furthermore, now that i think about it how did she waltz into the main residential area of the Xie family?? Shouldn't there be guards or something. Walls.
i spent 12 hours reading, 48 chapters out of 314. I think that i should get the general idea of this novel. I read a substantial amount more to give it more chance to see if i could invest myself in but unfortunately no
JosieGan:The point is you are too hasty to make a review, and your review is misleading because you missed too many plot. Especially like His Body Foundation!
Who dared to spread a rumor when your mother is the strongest? Sigh, Zhu Clan had a deep relationship with Xia Manor family, and she is his former fiance. And do you think guards of a family dared to stop a princess to enter? If you speak about family and family, Yes there is a mannerism like that. This is we talking about the Queen family, Do you think a royal need to inform his subject?
ysian:in realism, its dangerous mostly. Royalty needs to have a type of decorum. Rumors are bound to spread about the princess going alone to her former fiance's house. If pushing it a bit further, there should be mannerism between powerful households like messaging the other that they will come to their mansion for a visit. Furthermore, now that i think about it how did she waltz into the main residential area of the Xie family?? Shouldn't there be guards or something. Walls.
ysian:i spent 12 hours reading, 48 chapters out of 314. I think that i should get the general idea of this novel. I read a substantial amount more to give it more chance to see if i could invest myself in but unfortunately no
You know what yes i didn't read it properly because it was just a casual read and i was able to make up what was happening because i read that much wuxia manga and novel. If you don't want to take my critisicm, then just ignore it. There are always people who will enjoy your books but writing can always be improved and constructive criticism will definitely help you. You want more people to read and enjoy your books in the future right ? Bye now
Heh, such a reader who don't admit their mistake then blame the author couldn't accept criticism lol.
ysian:You know what yes i didn't read it properly because it was just a casual read and i was able to make up what was happening because i read that much wuxia manga and novel. If you don't want to take my critisicm, then just ignore it. There are always people who will enjoy your books but writing can always be improved and constructive criticism will definitely help you. You want more people to read and enjoy your books in the future right ? Bye now