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Red_Gaming_6847
Red_Gaming_6847Lv142yr
2022-01-12 11:34

I’m loving the story thus far but I believe you (the author) should probably come up with a better title ………………………………………………………………………………………………………………………….

Star Wars. Dropped. Why? Story is not consistent enough for webnovels.

Adde_1997
3.9

Liked it!

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Red_Gaming_6847
Red_Gaming_6847Lv14

Sorry that came off a bit callous I meant to write a review like a descent per son

2yr
Adde_1997
Adde_1997Author

sure, do you have a suggestion? I was not sure what kind of title to use. Same with the mc´s name.

2yr
Red_Gaming_6847
Red_Gaming_6847Lv14

Also you should add more tags so it’s easier for new readers to find it

2yr
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funmaxwell
funmaxwellLv13

the story might have been interesting. But I can't stand the way you used the word (you). as you seem to think that you're referring to yourself Mr. author but you're actually talking to your audience. which creates a very awkward contrast with the perspective within the story and it's a very good way to turn people or possible readers away from your story if that's what you were trying to do. then congrats you succeeded.

2yr

Dungeon_lord
Dungeon_lordLv4

What is the name so that I can find it on FanFiction.Net

1yr
JPWick
JPWickLv14

Did you transfer the book to fanfiction.net yet or some other platform and if you did what is it called cause I don’t exactly remember what it was called here

1yr
WhyNotBacon
WhyNotBaconLv14

I feel like this could have been a good story but you ruined it with the way you are addressing the mc. Like why didn't you just make up a random name for him and be done with it? It completely ruins the entire story.

2yr
Adde_1997
Adde_1997Author

My great despair was whether I should have it from a second or first perspective. I decided to use ´´you´´ because the reader is the main character. I almost used `` He``. "He walked out of the ship and pulled out a blaster" thats one way to write, and the other one is "You walked out of the ship and pulled a blaster." But I'll make an update later. To go from 2nd perspective. But thanks for the options, I need feed-back.

2yr
DavidTheDemon
DavidTheDemonLv11

It's hard to read. The author rides in a 2nd perspective that over time gets really anoying to read it like that................................

2yr
Changen4125
Changen4125Lv11

I would say that any work that uses a 2nd person POV except for "choose your adventure" types of books are bad. You aren't taking advice from the readers in terms of plot and we have no real input on how the character will act, so the 2nd person POV is not appropriate. Either use 1st person and stick onto the MC for the whole duration without ever changing perspectives unless necessary or go 3rd person.

2yr
DaoistWvVKJ9
DaoistWvVKJ9Lv1

What is Your Username For Fanfiction.net? For the Star wars fanfiction

7mth
fachlock
fachlockLv1

Me gusta la historia está buena. ............... . B. . .

2yr
Arion_Sturmklinge
Arion_SturmklingeLv2

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