Welp I am not an expert at writing reviews but still I can point out your mistakes the first mistake is the story fast paced way too fast pace in my pov also we didn't get to have a proper interaction with his family and freinds most of the fanfic authors kill of the mc's parents/freinds right away but parents/freinds are important in your own life and for your mental support too they can be a major pillar in your life too which reminds you that you have somebody you need to protect it helps in a lot of charchter development also I recommend you to take your time and write your fics breifly with a clear mind character I honestly don't see trap quite often so it's kinda rare btw keep up the good work also this maybe my own selfish request but I hope that you don't make this huge harem cause I probably think you will have a hard time writing it.. so try to make the harem small if possible if you can pull off a huge harem you can go on. btw I am sorry for my bad grammar idk if I did it correctly or not ....
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