Improved so far. The Cringeness could be tuned down a bit then it would be Great. Make the MC have his own personality and don't make him become a Try Hard Deadpool or Spiderman.
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In life if you don't try hard then your a loser 😂 this is the truth and he has his own personality but he needs more embellishments like being a super hero is great but he needs other Hobby's like science it can be expand on especially with how he is close to Peter he could very well try to replicate some of the things he gets from the hero store I would honestly those sticky bombs could be great if he made them him self and the elven potion it would be great if he could find alt plants to make it on earth maybe even make money by selling the watered down version to hospitals as a hemostatic med and so on he is not actually doing the most plus the fact the his intelligence is rising but it has not been expanded on is irksome right now we still believe his intelligence hasn't changed but it has according to the stats
"don't make him a try hard deadpool or spiderman" read it again and again until you get what he meant by that I'll give you an example in real world "Olie london"
Follower_of_Christ:In life if you don't try hard then your a loser 😂 this is the truth and he has his own personality but he needs more embellishments like being a super hero is great but he needs other Hobby's like science it can be expand on especially with how he is close to Peter he could very well try to replicate some of the things he gets from the hero store I would honestly those sticky bombs could be great if he made them him self and the elven potion it would be great if he could find alt plants to make it on earth maybe even make money by selling the watered down version to hospitals as a hemostatic med and so on he is not actually doing the most plus the fact the his intelligence is rising but it has not been expanded on is irksome right now we still believe his intelligence hasn't changed but it has according to the stats
I understand what you mean but I think your missing the point or your only picking up on one part of what I was saying number one spiderman is actually a good role model for heroes so there is nothing wrong with following in his footsteps while building your own understanding and persona as a hero oli London is trying to turn himself into someone else not emulate or copy or even try to embrace the ideals but he is just trying to turn himself into someone else that's not in anyway shape or form close to what the guy upstairs was talking about in my opinion I could be wrong I could be right what ever I don't care but I still stick to what I said there is nothing wrong with having heros you admire and want to be like and trying hard is a good thing i
KING_IN_YELLOW:"don't make him a try hard deadpool or spiderman" read it again and again until you get what he meant by that I'll give you an example in real world "Olie london"
yes spiderman is a good role model it's okay to "idolize" him, try harding to be a spiderman is another thing because you basically trying to be a second spiderman. it's good to try harding somethings in life, but there should be a limit on what you should "try hard", like i said olie london is try harding to be jimin he buys the clothes,shoes etc. almost everything that jimin wore, he is not like other fans who only "idolize" jimin, olie on the other hand is a try hard jimin.
Follower_of_Christ:I understand what you mean but I think your missing the point or your only picking up on one part of what I was saying number one spiderman is actually a good role model for heroes so there is nothing wrong with following in his footsteps while building your own understanding and persona as a hero oli London is trying to turn himself into someone else not emulate or copy or even try to embrace the ideals but he is just trying to turn himself into someone else that's not in anyway shape or form close to what the guy upstairs was talking about in my opinion I could be wrong I could be right what ever I don't care but I still stick to what I said there is nothing wrong with having heros you admire and want to be like and trying hard is a good thing i
Okay I get you he did go overboard
KING_IN_YELLOW:yes spiderman is a good role model it's okay to "idolize" him, try harding to be a spiderman is another thing because you basically trying to be a second spiderman. it's good to try harding somethings in life, but there should be a limit on what you should "try hard", like i said olie london is try harding to be jimin he buys the clothes,shoes etc. almost everything that jimin wore, he is not like other fans who only "idolize" jimin, olie on the other hand is a try hard jimin.
you mean try hard off brand jimin
KING_IN_YELLOW:yes spiderman is a good role model it's okay to "idolize" him, try harding to be a spiderman is another thing because you basically trying to be a second spiderman. it's good to try harding somethings in life, but there should be a limit on what you should "try hard", like i said olie london is try harding to be jimin he buys the clothes,shoes etc. almost everything that jimin wore, he is not like other fans who only "idolize" jimin, olie on the other hand is a try hard jimin.
