Great idea but a terrible flop with some of the worst grammar I’ve seen. The people expressing the lack of grammatical mistakes are lying. It’s littered with mistakes. That and the author is injecting random inner thoughts and comedic remarks into the story that break the cohesion. Details in the scene unfolding are expressed in the most basic way and are told to you in a way where you don’t feel as if you are there. It is just very badly written and hard to read.
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