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You are so talented but man some of that was hard to read. You had the right ideas but the flow needs work. I had to reread some paragraphs because the wording didn't make things clear. Find ways to be more efficient with your words take the time to round out skill

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Thank you for your constructive criticism. I will keep all the suggestions in mind for my future work.